What's Your Opinion About The 1st Chapter Of My Novel ( A Horror One )?

you seem to try and cram in far too many words to describe something simple, it distracts from the plot and makes for difficuly reading. eg "the ponds that inundated the wet ground," they are puddles! readers of horror/crime books are not realy interested in poetic descriptions,,,they want "gritty and gorry". save that kind of writting for poetry. sorry. as you can tell from my spelling, im not a writter, but im an avid reader of crime/horror novels,,this is too wordy and not realistic enough. to get the fear factor it needs to feel real,,,,not flowery and romantic. i think your style of writting would better suit a romance novel or fantasy fiction. good luck, and never give up on your dreams!